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stress related illnesses are becoming increasingly common. what do you think are the causes of this problem? what solutions can you suggest?

#stress #illnesses
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In modern society, everyone
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stress
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 different way and
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ittle bit
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stress
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 could help their life as
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otive. But too much
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 can lead them to several illnesses. For
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 reason, it is important to people that how
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elease
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 themself. Unless people
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stress
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 right way, they could get several illnesses.
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, some people
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 their
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 with drinking or smoking. Usually
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when people get too much
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, they cannot control themself. As
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 result, people going to be
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addict
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easily
. Smoking always
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 various illnesses like lungs or oral cancers. Not only smoking addict bring severe illnesses, but
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 alcoholism has several problems. Most of
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lcohol addict cannot live
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ormal life, because they usually have
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vibration
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 hands. I think it is important that how
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elease
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 well. In recent many studies, people who
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 their
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 with
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orkout usually, get less
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 than others.
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, their body
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 a good hormone for their mental and physical, during they are exercise. On the other hands, hang-out with friends can help to
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stress
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 well. As everyone knows,
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uman is
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ocial animal, so when people alone with too much
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, they are going to
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deep press
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, when people hang-out with
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 people or social groups, they are happier than alone.
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, their body
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 endorphin during they are laughing and talking. Conclusion,
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 is a part of people and we do not need to care
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 a bit
stress
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. But too much
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 can lead to several illnesses.
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, people should
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stress
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 right way, like workout or hang-out with people. These will be helpful for people's mental health and physical health from
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • constant connectivity
  • job demands
  • work-related stress
  • societal pressure
  • achieve success
  • erosion
  • work-life balance
  • exposure
  • negative news
  • social media comparisons
  • chronic stress
  • mental health support
  • stigma
  • flexible work hours
  • stress management techniques
  • mindfulness
  • access to mental health services
  • community support systems
  • emotional support
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