In many developing countries, there is an increasing movement of workers from rural areas into the cities. Why do you think this happens? What problems can this cause?

Movement of workers from rural to urban areas is becoming a very predominant phenomenon in developed nations. I believe the concentration of employment opportunities and efficient salaries are the principal factors causing
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relocation of
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a result of which members of
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many families suffer separation
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, villages do not get
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developed with enhanced work possibilities since the
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who can really contribute
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move to towns.
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, in cities, there
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widespread job
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because of extensive
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and high competition in every field. Industries established in cities
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several jobs
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sufficient pay for villagers. Even
people
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competing with counterparts, set up businesses and
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, to proceed forward with their
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they need skilled
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unskilled workers
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pulls a large
countryside
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proportion to fill
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. Since it is really hard to keep moving with a few shoulders
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expanding. The business owners even become ready to pay good salaries
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in turn becomes a great attraction for
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moving from villages to cities.
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a statistical survey in 2019, the number of villagers who moved to the urban areas
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recorded to be 40% of the rural population. The movement to make ends meet may sound essential,
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many children separated from their parents
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, they can not enjoy the parental care which should have been bestowed on them
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, they feel
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sense of being left out.
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a Social science department study, it was revealed
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25% of the families got separated
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of
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migration.
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to the aforementioned, because of
people
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relocating from rural regions, the development of work opportunities is impacted
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the lack of skilled resources who could have actually invested their thinking to bring better technology to working style and even the unskilled labour who would have facilitated intensive work requirements. To
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, I opine
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that employment
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to earn drives the migration from rural to urban
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, leaving
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aside the families apart and villages undeveloped in terms of job avenues.

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Task Response
Make your answer fit the exact task. The question asks for reasons why people move from rural areas to cities in developing countries and the problems this creates. Do not stray to other places. Use facts or simple examples that are easy to check.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make the essay easy to read. Use one idea in each paragraph. Start with a short intro that says what you will talk about, then a body paragraph for reasons, a body paragraph for problems, and a short conclusion.
Task Response
There is a visible plan to discuss both causes and effects.
Coherence
There are clear stage markers (Firstly, To summarize) that help guide the reader.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • move
  • move to
  • rural
  • city
  • urban
  • job
  • jobs
  • work
  • pay
  • money
  • education
  • school
  • training
  • skill
  • health
  • health care
  • hospital
  • transport
  • road
  • train
  • bus
  • housing
  • home
  • rent
  • crowding
  • overcrowding
  • traffic
  • pollution
  • noise
  • stress
  • unemployment
  • unemployed
  • farming
  • farm
  • harvest
  • drought
  • weather
  • climate
  • service
  • services
  • government
  • policy
  • plan
  • development
  • industry
  • factory
  • brain drain
  • youth
  • young
  • family
  • relatives
  • remittance
  • send money
  • village
  • country side
  • city life
  • city centre
  • rural area
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