In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think that these books and TV shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

Crime
novels and
TV
shows on
crime
are getting increasingly popular in most countries.
This
essay will discuss that the growing
crime
in our lives is what makes these shows popular. In my opinion
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these shows are intended towards making people more aware and cautious.
Crime
is growing at an enormous rate in almost every country. With the media being able to reach virtually every nook and corner of the city, these crimes are
also
being reported quite well. More often than not, books and
TV
shows are based on current events.
For example
, there is a show called "Savdhaan India" which describes the incidents that led to
a
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crime
and how one could have identified the subtle hints at different stages to have prevented it. The
endeavor
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of most of these books and
TV
dramas is to make people more aware and cautious and to be on the lookout for suspicious people and activities. They
also
highlight things like to keep our doors locked, to get the police verification done for our hired workers, to come forward to help in case we see our
neighbors
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in trouble and to file a complaint as soon as an incident occurs.
For example
, when I was hiring a maid from a placement agency to take care of my daughter, I got the police verification done.
This
gave me a sense of reassurance that the person I am hiring is genuine and can be trusted. In conclusion,
TV
shows and books are becoming popular due to the increase in
crime
in our societies.
Also
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they help increase awareness and cautiousness amongst people.
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