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Some people think that music plays an important role in society. Others think it is simply a form of entertainment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Music
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 plays a pivotal role in our
society
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;
however
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, some others believe it is just a type of
entertainment
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.
This
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 essay will state why
music
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 plays an important role and why some people feel it is only a source of
entertainment
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. I personally feel that
music
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 is extremely important.
Music
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 has been an integral part of our
society
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 since ancient times. In our history books, we have read how musicians were respected a lot for their talent. One
such
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 example is the singer Tansen who was considered to be one of the nine gems of King Ashoka. There have been many exceptional singers in our country whose melodious voices have always calmed and soothed a troubled mind.
Music
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also
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 spreads love and binds people together in harmony. Who would not swoon to the melodious voices of singers like Lata Mangeshkar and Asha Bhosle
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 Some people though consider
music
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 to be only a form of
entertainment
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.
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 people concentrate only on the commercialization of
music
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 rather than its soul.
Music
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 is no doubt used in the
entertainment
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 industry, in films,
advertizing
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advertising
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 etc,
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,
music
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 is what brings these to life. People would tend to hum these tunes only if the
music
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 is good and catchy.
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, lots of children remember the jingle associated with a Maggi advert. To conclude, despite the fact that some people consider
music
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 to be only a source of
entertainment
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, others believe that
music
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 is important to
society
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. In my opinion,
music
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 plays a vital role in our
society
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 as it brings the people closer with love, harmony and melody.
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