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People who read for pleasure in their free time have a better imagination than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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ssential hobby.It is said by some individuals that those individuals who read in their leisure time develop strong
imagination
power
 than those who watch
television
 in their free time.In my perspective,I completely agree with the statement that people who read books are more fanciful rather than those who watch
television
 and my viewpoints on
this
 issue will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs.
To begin
 with,
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 numerous kind of books
such
 as story,fiction,crime,comic and people read these based on their interest and some of them like to read because they want to increase their vocabulary.People who read books for fun are more creative and exotic because when they read any novel or story,
then
 they form the images of diverse characters in their mind which can be the result of their strong
imagination
power
.
For instance
, a survey was conducted in all the high schools of India in the year of 2017 and it had concluded that children who read more
strory
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story
 books are more creative than those who
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 less reading habits.
On the other hand
,Those who watch only
television
 are unable to develop the strong
imagination
power
 because they can see all the characters and images on
television
 which hinder their
imagination
power
 and
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 it becomes difficult for them to imagine deeply because when people read they get pressurized to think about the characters which
enhances
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 their ability to imagine deeply. To recapitulate, I would like to write that I personally believe that reading
story books
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 can enlighten their
imagination
power
 more as compared to those who only watch
television
.
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