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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Life
 is divided into different phases
such
 as childhood,teenage,adulthood and old age and each phase of
life
 has its own challenges.It is said by some individuals that
life
 was not complicated in ancient
time
 as compared to the modern era.In my perspective, I completely agree with the statement and my viewpoints on
this
 topic will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs.
To begin
 with, during the olden era there were fewer facilities
such
 as transportation and communication and people were very busy in their household chores ,but these days due to the advancement of technology human beings have more
time
 ,but they are suffering from various psychological disorders
such
 as anxiety and depression because there is less interaction between them .
For instance
, a survey was conducted in many developed and developing countries and its result was that these days youngsters and adults are always busy in their mobiles phones and laptops and they are not communicating with their family members which are causing several psychological issues.
Furthermore
, technology has raised the living expenses of people and it has
also
 increased the work pressure of people because they are working day and night in order to earn money and they have opted materialistic attitude towards
life
 and
this
 is the reason they are working like machines but during the ld
time
 people were not materialistic.To illustrate,People used to enjoy nature and they love to live in cities,but these days people prefer to enjoy the vibrant city
life
. To recapitulate, I would like to write that
life
 was really simple and easy and beautiful in ancient
time
 as compared to the modern era.
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