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Band 6.5

You have just won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend to go with you. Write a letter to your friend. In this letter: Give details about the concert. Describe how you won the tickets. Explain why you have chosen your friend to go with you.

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Dear Vladislav, How are you? I hope you are doing great. I am writing you
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 letter in order to invite you to the concert of the group The
weekend
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Weekend
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. As you know
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 concert is
held
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being held
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 in Khakimiyat near our school, a singer from America came to us to give his show, the
world famous
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world-famous
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 singer Abel sings there, and there is a support band there. Recently a lottery was held in our local market;
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, l decided to take part in it. The conditions of the lottery are simple: you put money in and it spins, giving you a prize, I spun it with my all might and that's luck, I won 2 tickets to the band's performance The weekend. I was looking for someone to go to
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 gorgeous concert with and decided that with you I would be more comfortable and more fan since you are my most devoted friend. I look forward to your answer with great enthusiasm. Warm wishes, Arthur

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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single clear idea for better structure. For instance, separate the concert's details, the story of winning the tickets, and why you’ve chosen this friend into distinct paragraphs.
Coherence & Cohesion
Improve cohesiveness by using a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect ideas more smoothly.
Task Achievement
For a higher Task Achievement score, include more specific details about the concert, such as the date, time, and any special significance it might have. This will make your invitation more compelling and provide a fuller answer to the task.
Task Achievement
Maintain a friendly and informal tone throughout the letter to ensure it feels personal and engaging to the reader. Use expressions and idiomatic language that reflect this tone.
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