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currently many people fail to balance the work with the other parts of lives, what are the reasons and how to solve it?

#people #balance #work #parts #lives
A balanced
life
 between personal and work is one of the most cumbersome
task
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, many would have faced.
Although
 it is said to be achieved by following certain practice, a large number of
w
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orking population struggling to achieve. We can have a discussion, what are the reasons and how to solve it. While speaking about employees, they have task pressure, even though they belong to different industries.
In particular
, as an example, software industries push their employees to complete the project within the time frame. They started spending their whole time in office, slowly turning into a workaholic. These nature affect their personal
life
, so it leads to an imbalanced lifestyle. A person concentrates on personal
life
 is happier because he stays away from
job
 pressure and has only
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ew commitments.
For Instance
, a financially satisfied guy does not require support from lending companies, and need not stick in the
job
 without satisfaction. To explain with an example, Ashok had taken a loan from a bank based on the
job
, and a trajecedic scenario led him to lost the
job
. Even though he completed half of his tenure, the bank started following him for due payments. It certainly creates a mental pressure. As a conclusion, for everyone who wants to have a peaceful and balanced
life
, financial control is a must. A saying mentions, more power comes with more responsibilities. To lead a peaceful and balanced activity, organise your work and personal chart and follow the chart. It definitely helps to balance the work with the other parts of lives.
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