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People today know fewer of their neighbours than in the past. Why is this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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In the modern world, people are so busy with their day to day life in the present situation.
As a result
,people not known in their community. Because of
this
 each family facing the issue whenever happening in their family. In my opinion, To avoid any problem in their family they should know each their neighbours People live in many apartments and villa's in Urban development due to their financial status.
Firstly
 people intrest to buying the apartment in cities compare to
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ndividual house.
Secondly
 many are working couple in modern society for improving their living status.
For example
 , as a couple working in different offices in the same city and meeting the night hours.So they are not able to meet their neighbours in day
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 . In the past, our previous generations are not focusing on financial improvement rather than focusing on their relationship with their neighbours.
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, small cities and villages people well known by their neighbours as well in the streets. Because of that if they face any issues in their family , they can easily solve the problem with their known circle. As per my opinion, every people in the community, they should know each other .So that they can easily solve their problem .If we follow
this
 behaviour, the
next
 generation
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 follows our habits.
This
 will improve the relationship each and every individual in the modern world. If we improve the relationship , it will improve the country growth . So we will try to know each other.
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