The rising levels of congestion and air pollution found in most of the world cities can be attributed directly to the rapidly increasing number of private cars in use. In order to reverse, this decline in the quality of life in cities attempt must be made to encourage people to use their cars less and public transport more. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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no doubts that our earth is highly polluted by various factors. It is
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believed that private cars are the major causative factor for
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contamination.
Therefore
, minimising the cars on the road and encouraging public transportation among people would reduce the issue and I agree
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statement because it has been a proven method in many countries.
Firstly
, the personalised vehicles, specifically cars, can create traffic congestion as more and more
passangers
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passengers
prefer to use
this
due to its convenience.
As a result
, exhausts from these cars can be huge, which contain a lot of carbon footprints.
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would raise the atmospheric temperature
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an alarming rate. Eventually, in cities, life becomes miserable and may require
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air conditions
air-conditions
that again
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environment.
For example
, in a recent study showed that during the time of
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locked
down, due to Covid-19, private vehicles were not allowed in some countries for a long period, which resulted in reducing poisonous fumes in
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tmosphere. Another point here is to consider is that promoting
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ublic to use
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ublic transport system as
this
can accommodate a large number of people in a vehicle at a time.
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not only
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the peak hour traffic, but the
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of carbon emissions would be controlled.
For instance
, share
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taxi
,
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, company vehicles are found to be useful and these are efficient, reliable and comfortable in many ways. Apart from
this
, commuters can have good saving and time for socialisation. In conclusion, even though air pollution is on the rise, by adopting
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ffective method to reduce the use of private
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vehicles
can eliminate the issue for
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ertain extent.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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