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Some people say it´s possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #it´s #person #culture #character #choice #clothes
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I completely agree with
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 statement. The clothes of a person is an extension of their thoughts and
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 (beliefs). Of course
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there are different places that
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 (requires) appropriate clothes (as some kind of jobs, formal occasions, etc) but beyond specific situations, people feel free to compose their own style and communicate how they are in the society. Below, I will explain my points of view. One thing
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 interesting in big cities, is the plurality of the culture.
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, in São Paulo, the city where I live, you can find different groups of people and you can imagine what their thoughts and feelings about many things.
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 is
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 a way of them to express their personality and can call other people to
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 as the same group. One problem that we can observe is the
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 that these people can get and depends on the tribe that
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 person is inserted, they can suffer preconception. To solve
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 problem is very simple. You have to give the freedom to people
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e wherever they want with no judgment. In my view, we must take into consideration that anyone is free and can choose their clothes to express themself and to find a group that think in the same way. Personally, I feel that with
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, you can communicate to the world who you are, without saying a word.
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