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some individual feel that working from home, while of befits to employees, is actually a drawback for employers. To what do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that telecommuting is only beneficial to workers， whereas it causes negative impacts on employers. Regarding
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 statement, I advocate the former but disagree with the latter point. As concerns employees, it is clear that they would have many advantages due to working from home.
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, these employees will save an amount of moment, money, and energy as they can stay
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 the room to work without having to pay for commuting expenses or waiting for the public. Another merit is that telecommuters are conveniences for staff who focus on their job, and they have less pressure from the boss than work in the office. It means that they have
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ree moment for what they want, but some personnel loft on their job without supervised by managers. In my opinion,
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, remote working both befits employees and employees. To be more specific, the staff far away from the office, the owners of companies can save a substantial amount of money, which saves spent on electricity and internet bills.meanwhile , the workers still productively from their home and contribute to the prosperity of the company as well as the employer.
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, telework is proved to have a positive impact on employee retention. Some recent surveys indicate that people who remote from home are more likely to stay at their companies for a long time, showing high levels of satisfaction and loyalty. To sum up, for the above-mention arguments I believe that remote industry is positive trends of modern society and it is beneficial to both employee and employers.
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