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University students must pay all costs associated with their education, because it benefits mostly them individually, rather than the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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University
education
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 benefits the student and the
society
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 in the long term.
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 the students directly benefit from it, the fees should be either subsidized or fully paid by the government.
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 is because the
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, on the whole, would gain from the knowledge and skills of the students. It is clear that higher
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 can determine the economic status of a country. The burden of paying for higher
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 is usually borne by the parents of the students in many parts of the world.
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 trend is changing as more and more students are paying their own fees and getting scholarships. If the cost of higher
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 is to be paid solely by the students,
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 there would be many bright minds losing out on essential
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. It is evident that societies that have state-sponsored
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 are more successful than those that don’t. Impoverished countries mainly in South Asia and Africa have long suffered the consequences of not having a well-educated workforce, especially those who have higher qualifications. Countries that have free
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 for their students have outperformed those that compel students to pay exorbitant fees. Germany, Norway, Sweden, Denmark and Finland are a few examples of successful and happy societies where students get state-sponsored
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.
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,there are countries like Bangladesh, Pakistan and Sudan to name a few that are definitely unhappy nations in many ways. Overall, the benefits of higher
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 are enjoyed by the
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 as well as the individual as all students ultimately contribute to the
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 the costs of their
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 must be paid by the governments or other social organizations.
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