Some people think that the government should increase tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to start eating healthy. Do you agree or disagree?
Needless to say
that
consumption of fast Correct determiner usage
the
food
adversely affecting
the health of Wrong verb form
affects
a
human Correct article usage
apply
being
. Some Fix the agreement mistake
beings
people
claimed
Wrong verb form
claim
,
it is essential to impose a high tax on junk Remove the comma
apply
food
because it may discourage people
from eating fast food
. In my opinion, hefty charges can reduce the consumption rate but will not motivate them for nutritious food
items, and
I Correct word choice
apply
also
explain some points which strengthen my viewpoint in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, imposing heavy levies on fast food
means an increase in price
Correct article usage
the price
on
commodities which directly Change preposition
of
affect
the middle class and poor Correct subject-verb agreement
affects
people
. To be more specific, junk food
like burgers, pizzas and street foods available
at affordable rates at various apps like Add a missing verb
are available
zomato
and Change the capitalization
Zomato
swiggy
. Change the capitalization
Swiggy
As a
result
working Add a comma
result,
people
and students who live away from homes prefer junk food
because they do not have enough time to prepare a meal. Eventually, if the government increase the tax on fast food
, it will not affect the rich people
they will continue to consume it.
On the other hand
, there some
other methods through which Add a missing verb
are some
this
problem could be solved. First is, healthy foodstuff should be more affordable and accessible so that everyone, especially weaker
section of the society can easily afford it and easily approachable for the working Correct article usage
the weaker
people
. Because many
Correct word choice
Many
people
are aware of the ill effect
of unhealthy eating habits but the availability of Fix the agreement mistake
effects
ready to eat
Add a hyphen
ready-to-eat
food
is comparatively more than healthy products. In addition
to this
, parents should try that children do not go too
fast Correct your spelling
to
food
shops, so for that parents have to prepare some healthy meal
at home. Fix the agreement mistake
meals
Last
but not least, the government set the duties of some health advisors who organize camps in different areas and
give information about healthy and unhealthy Correct word choice
apply
food
and also
explain the harmful impacts of fast food
.
In conclusion, after analyzing all the points, it is clear that
Imposing more tax on food
is not only the solution because it will deter low-income groups from buying them. If the governments want to reduce the consumption of fast food
, they should spread the awareness of self-discipline towards the eating pattern.Submitted by Simran on
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