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These days many of us prefer to throw damaged things away, whereas in the past people used to repair damaged items and keep them for a long time. Explain why you think this change has happened? What are the effects of this change in attitude?

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The diagram illustrates the
number
 of graduates from universities in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Overall, the female graduates were greater in numbers than their male counterparts and that trend gradually increased over the years. Categorically, from 1992 to 2000, the differences between male and female graduates were nearly equal. In 1992, almost 70,000 male candidates completed their graduation in Canda, whereas for the female students, the
number
 was almost 30,000 more for the same. In 1994, the
number
 increased slowly but after that year, there was a slight dip in numbers for both categories. In 2000, the
number
 started to elevate and there were nearly 75,000 male graduates and almost 105,000 female graduates in the same year. Moving on to the other years, from 2002 to 2007, the
number
 of both males and females rose rapidly. In 2004, there were almost 125,000 female graduates who were 40,000 more than their male counterparts. The differences between the two were
also
 increased and in 2007, the difference was almost for 55,000 candidates and the
number
 of female graduates almost touched the mark of 150,000.
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