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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

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In
this
 concurrent world, it is indefinitely true that
university
education
 plays a prominent role in finding a skilled
work
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workers
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 across the globe.
However
, some students take a year off for a holiday or in search of
a
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real-time
work
experience
 before joining
u
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niversity. I strongly agree with
this
 point of view, as I believe that students can broaden their personal
experience
 through travelling, while
other
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 can utilize it to gain some real-time
work
experience
. There is no rush in joining
university
 after college. Taking a break off will actually help students in focus and gaining confidence.
In other words
, visiting different places will improve our social skills, which are very much needed for the
university
 atmosphere. Take Tokyo
for example
, a majority of college students travels abroad to gain a lively
experience
 and increase their
self esteem
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. Having
a
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work
experience
 will benefit the student undertaking
university
education
. students take
y
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a
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ear off for working to support their
education
 financially and
also
 helps them to gain a real-time
experience
, which can be used as an early boost in finding jobs after finishing
university
. The
experience
 learnt can
also
 be useful in understanding the subject much
more
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better. There is a survey conducted by
U
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niversity of Queensland, which states 40% of students join
u
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a
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niversity with at least
1 year
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1-year
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experience
 in order to understand the
university
 level subjects. In conclusion, taking
b
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a
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reak helps
s
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the
a
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tudent to overcome fears and help their
education
 financially.
However
, the benefits
depends
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 on how students utilize the
break off
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.
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