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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

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In
this
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 concurrent world, it is indefinitely true that
university
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education
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 plays a prominent role in finding a skilled
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work
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 across the globe.
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, some students take a year off for a holiday or in search of
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real-time
work
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experience
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 before joining
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u
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niversity. I strongly agree with
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 point of view, as I believe that students can broaden their personal
experience
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 through travelling, while
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 can utilize it to gain some real-time
work
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experience
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. There is no rush in joining
university
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 after college. Taking a break off will actually help students in focus and gaining confidence.
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, visiting different places will improve our social skills, which are very much needed for the
university
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 atmosphere. Take Tokyo
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, a majority of college students travels abroad to gain a lively
experience
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 and increase their
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. Having
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work
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experience
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 will benefit the student undertaking
university
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education
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. students take
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ear off for working to support their
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 financially and
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 helps them to gain a real-time
experience
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, which can be used as an early boost in finding jobs after finishing
university
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. The
experience
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 learnt can
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 be useful in understanding the subject much
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better. There is a survey conducted by
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U
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niversity of Queensland, which states 40% of students join
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u
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niversity with at least
1 year
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experience
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 in order to understand the
university
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 level subjects. In conclusion, taking
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reak helps
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tudent to overcome fears and help their
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 financially.
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, the benefits
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 on how students utilize the
break off
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.
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