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Buying things in the internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this ways outweigh the disadvantages?

#internet #books #air #tickets #groceries
Nowadays, the internet is the key to everything. You can buy whatever you want online, without going anywhere. I believe the shopping experience changed for good and we can see more advantages than disadvantages in
this
 new world. Some years ago, we had to go to a mall to buy a TV or even a simple pen. Now we have plenty of options at home, sometimes the delivery is faster than go there in person. If you are in the middle of a busy day and didn't have chance to buy something you need urgently, you can make your purchase online and a soon as you arrive at home, there it is. Your item will be waiting for you.
However
, people are getting lazy, they don't want to walk anymore. The disadvantage of the internet, in
this
 case, the people forgot the funny part of choosing in person the product. It's amazing to ouch the fruits at the supermarket or read a little bit of the book you want to buy. I think we can use the internet wisely, the balance between buy online and in-person is necessary for our community to grow without losing our identity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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