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Buying things in the internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this ways outweigh the disadvantages?

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Presently, purchasing items and services online has been trending and I think the benefits are more than its disadvantages. I will be shedding more light on the advantages and disadvantages of
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online shopping and
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 give my opinion on which of them I think is more. On one hand, buying things online has been seen to be a blessing to most persons for so many reasons.
Firstly
, e-commerce is
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it is very convenient.
For example
, Before now people had to go through the pain of leaving their houses to the shops, sometimes in very harsh weather conditions, other times one had to squeeze out time from their very busy schedules just to go shopping and if they are not lucky, they may have to queue up before getting what they want,
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since the onset of online shopping, people don't need to go through all of these stress anymore.
Secondly
, Online markets are very accessible and transactions can be done at any time and anywhere even in the comfort of your homes, and
this
 done effortlessly.
Thirdly
, it comes with a lot of discounts that are mouth watery.
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ime of delivery has been the major problem with online services.
For instance
, some groceries when bought via internet requires about few days to few weeks and even up to a month or two sometimes, But
this
 is no longer a problem as most websites have developed faster delivery means for their customers. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that getting thing online has greater benefits than drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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