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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. Discuss the benefits of this development and problems associated with it.

#year #school #university #development
In today's world, school and
collage
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 education is the most important part of everyone's
student
's life because through
this
 period
one
 can learns and gain various knowledge and develop themselves. To add on nowaday's it's becoming increasingly popular that
student's
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students
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 are taking a year off between finishing school and going to university
this
 might be due to trend which
student
's are following nowaday's and
one
 should take a
gap
 of some time because they are entering the new face of their life by going to the
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.
Firstly
,
to begin
 with, talking about education, nowaday's it's very much important for every child. In the 21st century, according to me these day's institute and
collage
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college
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 life are very much crucial for each and every
student
's. After completing the schooling
one
 will be entering into
collage
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college
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 and
this
 phase is very crucial for each and everyone and these day's it's becoming a trend that
student's
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students
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 are taking a period division before going to the university.
Secondly
,
One
 should take
this
gap
 because an undergraduate should think about their future that how they are going to shape themselves. Meanwhile,
this
 they might be facing a various challenge and there are number's of development opportunity's too, like in
this
 time span
one
 can obtain various short term courses which will help them in their
collage
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 studies and they might face problem like related to study because they have taken huge
gap
 between their education so they might feel demotivated.
Lastly
, to conclude according to me it depends on
student
's that they want to take
this
gap
 or not but due to
this
one
 year
gap
 they might be challenged with various problem's and they can develop themselves too.
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