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Modern technology is changing our world. This has advantages such as bringing people closer together through communication. It also has disadvantages such as destroying the differences between cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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New technologies revolutionize many things in
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 contemporary world which has positive and negative effects on everyone’s life.
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technology
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ood source of communication which helps to bring people close to each other, it affects the culture of some nation as some people do not prefer to talk on
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elephone.
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 essay will discuss both the benefits and drawbacks of modern
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. TO commence with, modernization in
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 provides comfort in life and it makes
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life easier than before. One phone call can solve the big problem within minutes, there is no need to wait and visit
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any place.
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, I am going somewhere and if my parents are not at home, I will call to let them know where I am going rather than waiting.
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, it saves lots of
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 and connects the whole world together.
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, there is no difference if anyone is living overseas because
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hone. People can do email, phone call and messages anytime to anyone without any
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 problem. It will deliver the messages at the same to another person which is helpful in an emergency case.
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, people are doing more face
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 each other
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 of
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ersonal meeting. It is demolishing cultural activity to visit
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 person’s house for meeting or
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up of tea. They are getting information online through chat about each other
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 why they do not travel and not try to find special
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eeting. In conclusion, while there are advantages of modern
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, it has some perilous ramifications on culture. It should
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 in limit and people should meet not daily but try to meet one
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 in a month.
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