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The responsibility to prevent global environment damsge is on politician than individual. Do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays,
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orld is differing from one major
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that is
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environment
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 damage. Most people argued that
environment
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issue
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 relates to politics .policies and implementation only can decide the way to overcome
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issue
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. But I believe only politicians and their work cannot safe the
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 from
damaging
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. People need
a joint efforts
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a joint effort
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 to control the factors which harm surrounding.
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, global warming is increasing day by day due to access use of vehicles. People tendency to buy on
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ar has increased on large scale from
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ast decade.
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, consumerism, enhance the purchasing capacity of people to buy unwanted things that leads to
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n
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umber of factories. These factories are
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iggest cause of air pollution.
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 people throw garbage on roads. In result
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a heap of litters has been noticed all
round
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 the street which
cause
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 devastate the
environment
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.
Politician
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A politician
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 can solve the problem alone. They make
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 and policies so that wastage from industries can be prevented to deposit in the river.
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they can make the
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 against having more than one vehicle in the family. But people
also
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 participate in
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 programme and policies so that these policies and
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 would implement completely. Without the positive gesture to these norms
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no obligation and
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 can be successful.
Politician
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 should have to make
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aw against motor vehicle so that there will less number of vehicles on road and people should obey
these
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this greenlaw
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greenlaw
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 for benefit of
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hole society. To conclude,
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e
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nvironment is damaging on
alraming
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alarming
 pace. Only
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 cannot protect
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urrounding. People will have to work to solve
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issue
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 jointly with lawmakers.

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