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Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it is wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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People have different opinions regarding what should be the purpose of
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edding. Some people believe you could only marry if there is affection between individuals, while others think, people should marry a rich individual.
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 individual whom you love can make your
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 less stressful. Because you love the person, it suggests that you will have relatively fewer conflicts with your partners in future.
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 of that, your wedding is likely to
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 lifelong, and it is unlikely individual would face
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ivorce or another wedding. Having
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 a balanced marriage
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 can be very peaceful.
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, it will
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 make your
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 delightful due to warm relation you will have with your partner throughout
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hole
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. Your partner will be with you side by side at every stage of your
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 to share your success and failure.
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 marriage can complement your
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 in many ways.
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view, to marry only rich people doesn't seem to give the satisfaction one would wish. Individuals would be able to buy all comforts using money, but they will not have the luxury of genuine warm relationship, which is essential for a happy
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 if one marry with a rich person with the intention of using their money, the relationship is less likely
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urvive, as the base of the relationship is
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 on the wealth. It will only survive until
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inancial situation is well. To conclude, it seems marrying
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 individual you love can be proved worthwhile as it brings steadiness and pleasure in
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ndividual's
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. Marrying rich, marriage wouldn't survive through difficult times.

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Your opinion

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