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Courses and general online study have recently become very popular. However, some people still prefer to attend classes in person. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Education is crucial for survival in the contemporary era.While some people opine that traditional classes are better than the online
system
, I prefer online teaching
system
. I will substantiate my views along with an example in the following paragraphs. Due to, the rapid development made in science stream a new form of education is now available.
First
 of all, the e-learning
system
 has not only expanded beyond limits but
also
 is available everywhere.
In addition
 to
this
, neither do we need to travel nor we have to spend time finding quality teachers.
Secondly
, online teaching methods are less expensive  and better teaching methods inculcates enhanced learning.
For example
, the Bygu’s classes which are conducted online improved their students score not only by 20% but
also
 cleared their doubts and made them a better individual to fit into the modern society.  
Although
, online learning is available at an affordable rate the types of equipment needed to procure these courses are costly.
To begin
 with, there is not only less face to face interactions but
also
 there is less socialization due to
this
 computerized method.
Consequently
,
this
 can lead to loneliness and other psychological problems.
Moreover
, traditional method
system
 employs more and more teachers
thus
 providing employment.
For instance
, the rural teaching scheme employed about 5,000 teachers to teach the economically backward students in Pune rural areas.  To recapitulate, every observation has its pro and cons,
however
, I believe that the online method has more advantages than disadvantages.
Hence
, more and more students must crave for the online education
system
 and schools must
also
 introduce them in their teaching methods.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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