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Some people believe that students should be taught international news as a subject at school. Others feel that this would be a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
this
 contemporary era, the news is the indispensable part of life. The news gives information about day to day affairs with people. So, some people believe that to introduce news as a
subject
 in schools plays a vital role in the future life of students, whereas others argue that it would be a waste of valuable time. I partially agree with the aforesaid statement.
First
 and foremost, nowadays, every person wants to be updated in every field with the help of news. To introduce
this
 in the academic curriculum will develop students’ interest, due to
this
 they should well inform the current affairs in over the world.
Also
, if they keen interest in it,
then
 they will pursue
this
 field in their future.
In addition
 to the above, they
also
 can take small steps to mitigate some gigantic problems like global warming and polar ice melting at a small age, owing to
this
 they, not only halt usage of plastic and reduce pollution but
also
 they can teach their children these things effectively. The main work of news is to prevail in the truth. If news introduces as a
subject
,
then
 they should be aware of the value of the truth and they will teach
this manners
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 to their children as well.
On the other hand
, sometimes to add extra
subject
 is to give burden to students.
Moreover
, there are many events happening in the world and some are not related to the age of students. So, if students would know about
this
 news,
then
 it will affect them in a very bad manner, because of
this
 they would suffer from some incurable diseases.
Furthermore
, sometimes news channels prod cast nuisance for their benefits. To conclude, the government should introduce
this
subject
 with some restrictions. So, students have only knowledge which is related and require for them.
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