stress related illnesses are becoming increasingly common. what do you think are the causes of this problem? what solutions can you suggest?

In modern society, everyone
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stress
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different way and
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ittle bit
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stress
could help their life as
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otive. But too much
stress
can lead them to several illnesses. For
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reason, it is important to people that how
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elease
stress
themself. Unless people
release
stress
right way, they could get several illnesses.
for example
, some people
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stress
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when people get too much
stress
, they cannot control themself. As
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result, people going to be
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addict
easly
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easily
. Smoking always
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various illnesses like lungs or oral cancers. Not only smoking addict bring severe illnesses, but
also
alcoholism has several problems. Most of
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lcohol addict cannot live
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ormal life, because they usually have
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or
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vibration
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hands. I think it is important that how
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elease
stress
well. In recent many studies, people who
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their
stress
with
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orkout usually, get less
stress
than others.
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a good hormone for their mental and physical, during they are exercise. On the other hands, hang-out with friends can help to
release
stress
well. As everyone knows,
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uman is
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ocial animal, so when people alone with too much
stress
, they are going to
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deep press
depress
quickly.
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, when people hang-out with
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people or social groups, they are happier than alone.
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, their body
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endorphin during they are laughing and talking. Conclusion,
stress
is a part of people and we do not need to care
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a bit
stress
. But too much
stress
can lead to several illnesses.
Therefore
, people should
release
stress
right way, like workout or hang-out with people. These will be helpful for people's mental health and physical health from
stress
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • constant connectivity
  • job demands
  • work-related stress
  • societal pressure
  • achieve success
  • erosion
  • work-life balance
  • exposure
  • negative news
  • social media comparisons
  • chronic stress
  • mental health support
  • stigma
  • flexible work hours
  • stress management techniques
  • mindfulness
  • access to mental health services
  • community support systems
  • emotional support
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