Some people believe that the government should financially support retired people. Others feel that those who have retired should pay to support themselves. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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society is one of several problems. Many elderly people retired and they cannot earn money anymore. So, some people say that

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overnment should

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them financially. And other people say people who retired should pay to

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themselves. In my opinion,

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overnment should

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them but not only financially. They should give some other opportunities to retired people for they live by themselves. People

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retirement could be homeless on condition that

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overnment do not

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them. In

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research shows,

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uman can live almost 100years-old or more, because of

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medical technology.

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, elderly people usually retired when they are 65years-old, and after

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, they do not have enough money for their life. For

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reason,

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overnment should financially

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retired people.

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, providing that

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pay to retired people for

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, other people have to pay more tax and it could lead to

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conomy problem of

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ation.

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, many elderly people have depression after they retired

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because they believe they are not part of society anymore.

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overnment should help them not only financially but

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mentally.

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, if health care people retired, they cannot work their field anymore, but they still have knowledge of medical, and I believe they can work as a volunteer for poor people. If

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overnment pay for the elderly volunteer, it will good for both of them. In conclusion,

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overnment should

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retired people. But if they

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only financially, it could bring some other problems. In my opinion, if

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overnment give some other job to elderly people, depressing of retired people rate will decrease.

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do not have

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more tax for retired people.