In many countries good schools and medical facilities only available in cities. Some people believe that new teachers and doctors should work in rural area for few years, but some think everyone should be free to choose where they work, discuss both and give opinion.

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Basic education and healthcare should be available to each person in the country irrespective of whether a person is from a rural area or an urban
city
. But in most countries,
this
is limited to cities only. Many people think newly graduated teachers and doctors should spend the early part of their career in rural areas while others think they should have a choice. In my opinion,
although
it can beneficial to give everyone a choice, I believe that new teachers and doctors should work in rural areas for some time. While everyone should have the freedom to decide where they perform, it would be wrong to force someone to have a
job
in a place against their will.
Firstly
many best schools are in cities so naturally any new teacher would like to work in them.
For instance
, my friend Ajay who recently finished his bachelors in education is looking for a
job
in Bal Bharti school which is one of the top school in our
city
. Even though he was offered a
job
in a rural area as well but he rejected it because it was not paid that well.
Similarly
, new doctors look to find
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ob in big hospitals in the
city
as they have the latest machines and facilities. There are some government schools and hospitals in rural areas but not as good as the
city
schools and hospitals.
This
is due to the lack of good teachers and doctors willing to stay there. If the government can make it a mandate of any new employee to stay in rural areas for few areas and pay them well,
this
could significantly improve the conditions of education and health services in rural areas.
This
can be achieved by some incentive programs
such
as good salaries or better living facilities. People living in rural areas
then
would not have to travel to metro cities in search of better services in schools or hospitals.
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essay has discussed both the views in detail. In my opinion, there can be some problems of forcing new teachers and doctors to have
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ob in rural areas for a few years,
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, I believe the benefits outshine the disadvantages.
Additionally
,
this
can be done through some simple changes only.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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  • In general

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