In many countries good schools and medical facilities only available in cities. Some people believe that new teachers and doctors should work in rural area for few years, but some think everyone should be free to choose where they work, discuss both and give opinion.

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Basic education and healthcare should be available to each person in the country irrespective of whether a person is from a rural area or an urban

city

. But in most countries,

this

is limited to cities only. Many people think newly graduated teachers and doctors should spend the early part of their career in rural areas while others think they should have a choice. In my opinion,

although

it can beneficial to give everyone a choice, I believe that new teachers and doctors should work in rural areas for some time. While everyone should have the freedom to decide where they perform, it would be wrong to force someone to have a

job

in a place against their will.

Firstly

many best schools are in cities so naturally any new teacher would like to work in them.

For instance

, my friend Ajay who recently finished his bachelors in education is looking for a

job

in Bal Bharti school which is one of the top school in our

city

. Even though he was offered a

job

in a rural area as well but he rejected it because it was not paid that well.

Similarly

, new doctors look to find

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ob in big hospitals in the

city

as they have the latest machines and facilities. There are some government schools and hospitals in rural areas but not as good as the

city

schools and hospitals.

This

is due to the lack of good teachers and doctors willing to stay there. If the government can make it a mandate of any new employee to stay in rural areas for few areas and pay them well,

this

could significantly improve the conditions of education and health services in rural areas.

This

can be achieved by some incentive programs

such

as good salaries or better living facilities. People living in rural areas

then

would not have to travel to metro cities in search of better services in schools or hospitals.

This

essay has discussed both the views in detail. In my opinion, there can be some problems of forcing new teachers and doctors to have

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ob in rural areas for a few years,

However

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, I believe the benefits outshine the disadvantages.

Additionally

this

can be done through some simple changes only.

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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