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In many countries,plastic shopping bags are main source of rubbish.Do you agree or diagree?

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Introduction
In many
countires
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countries
, the main type of trash is
plastic
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 shopping bags. I agree with
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 notion. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the reasons
of
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why people
use
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plastic
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 bags.
Body paragraph 1
Although
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 there are many
organazations
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organizations
avocate
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advocate
use
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 their own bags when they are shopping.
However
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, there are still many people
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u
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who
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se
the
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plastic
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 bags. The main reason is they do not have a
conciousness
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consciousness
 to aware
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of
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using
plastic
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 bags. For
this
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 cause, the government might not promote enough environment protection of
vidio
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video
 or advertisement.
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, if people do not know how
plastic
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 damage our environment,
then
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 they do not aware to
use
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plastic
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 bags in their daily life.
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,
g
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overnment should encourage citizens to
use
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 their own bags
in stead
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instead
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 of
plastic
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 bags.
Body paragraph 2
The
second
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 main reasons to cause
this
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 situation is people think to
use
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plastic
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 bags is more convenience, they do not need to remember
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bring their own bags and they do not need to wash their bags. The best example is when people buy fish, they tend to
use
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p
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lastic bag.
This
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 is because they do not need to wash their bags. Compare with using
plastic
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 bags, they just need to throw it in the rubbish bin when they back home.
This
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also
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make
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 people prefer to
use
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plastic
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 bags.
Moreover
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, when they go to
supermaket
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supermarket
supermarkets
 for shopping, they
also
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 need to bring their own bags every time.
Therefore
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, they might feel
ennoying
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annoying
.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
although
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 people
use
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plastic
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 bags will harmful to our environment.
However
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, they do not
concious
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conscious
 to aware
use
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plastic
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 bags because
g
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the
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overnment do not promote some information to teach people ecology knowledge.
In addition
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, people
also
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 believe that using their eco bags is
a
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trouble.
Hence
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, these cause
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plastic
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 bags
b
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ecome the main kind of rubbish.

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