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some companies sponsor sports as way to advertise themselves, some people think is a good idea. others think that there are disadvantages

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while some people think that
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aboult
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about
disadvantage
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, others focus on advantages, in that essay, I'm going to talk
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about
 both opinions giving my point,
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 I know that it is a polemic topic and I will respect all of
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, in my point of view, most of the companies like
sponsor
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 sports, when I watch game games I can see a lot of brands everywhere, I don't know how much
money
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 they spend to stay there, but I think that it is not cheaper,
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,
this
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money
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 from the famous companies, is really helpful to sports development,
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, I can not imagine sports without
money
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 and good sponsors working together.
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, people that talk
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about
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, they say that some people just practise sport thinking
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about
money
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,
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,soccer player, they use to choose a team to play just look at salary,
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 a disaster when people just play sports for
money
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. another
disadvantage
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, when
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 sports that, there is a lot of companies doing the same thing,
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, if another company do something different and new, maybe it will be better for they to advertise.
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, the most important way to decide
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 something is checking if it will be helpful or
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, from my view, companies have to analyse the brand and decide which sport they will
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, nowadays,to be honest, to be famous is necessary spend
money
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 advertising sports and another thing.
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