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there seems to be an increasing amount of serious crimes committed each year. While some think the bet way is to use the death penalty as a deterrent, many people believe that other measures will be needed. Discuss both sides.

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The rate of criminals is going up more and more rapidly in today’s society, and there are different views about the solution
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 problem. Some people think that the most effective penalty is capital punishment while other people believe that other methods should be employed suitably. On the one hand, there is a popular view that the death penalty is one of the most measures due to some reasons. -Capital punishment bring absolute safe for victims when dangerous criminals cannot exist. - It is a proper penalty for horrible action of offenders
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, the government should impose other methods in order to reduce the
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 of criminals because
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many reasons. - Re-educating prisoners as a solution bring an opportunity to have a new life again.
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