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Money should be spent on creating new public buildings such as museums or town halls rather than renovating the existing ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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That is
 no doubt that cities are growing and developing fast. There are many people who think it would be better to review the existing constructions rather than building new ones. I strongly believe that money would be better invested
on
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 renovating the current buildings and in
this
 essay, I will present some arguments that support my view. One problem of big cities is the lack of concern about preserving its culture and historical buildings. To cover the high demand of people coming from the countryside, many big mayors might be focusing only on supporting the real estate market and its interests,
instead
 of preserving their cities' old constructions.
This
 could be happening because they might wonder that many people believe large centres can offer more opportunities and a better quality of life.
As a result
, many important public buildings
such
 as national libraries and museums are becoming deprecated and with poor conditions to attend the public. Another issue that has grown in several large cities is the loss of its visual identities. Since some governments seem not to worry about keeping their culture alive, many public buildings are being constructed without following any pattern or criteria.
This
 becomes a problem because the traditional buildings may have started to appear old and outdated when
next
 to the new ones. To solve
this
, the city authorities should establish some rules for keeping some standards for new constructions and invest part of the cultural budget in restoring and beautifying their long-living buildings.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • symbolizes
  • evolving
  • aspirations
  • incorporate
  • accessibility
  • catalyst
  • economic development
  • heritage
  • conserves
  • cultural
  • integrity
  • operational inefficiencies
  • sustainably
  • repurpose
  • throwaway culture
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental degradation
  • context-specific
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