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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Around the globe, people will be experiencing some drastic changes in the near future. These changes will not only be due to
the
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nature;
however
,
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ise in the
population
 and the increase in levels of
illiteracy
 will
also
 be prominent factors to it.
This
 essay will
further
 discuss the said two issues and it will conclude by posing some solutions like laws for
population
 control and free
education
 to curb the
illiteracy
.
Firstly
, we should discuss
about
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the problem of
population
 explosion. Nowadays, the
population
 is pacing at a very high uncontrollable
rate
 and,
this
 is the right time for our legislators to make certain laws before
this
 issue gets out of reach. Due to
this
 factor
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there are many children who
does
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 not get proper
education
 because their parents are insufficient in compensating the needs of all of their children.
Secondly
,
this
 issue gives birth to another problem of
illiteracy
.
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 is aware
about
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 the
amount
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 of money schools and colleges charge these days. Due to the increased fees in schools and colleges
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a father can not take the burden of providing
education
 to all of his children which results in
illiteracy
.
For instance
, Naugaon, a village near Rajasthan (India) is
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ensely populated area, due to which every 2 in 4 children is uneducated.
Consequently
,
this
 increases the
illiteracy
rate
of
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 the countryside. There are two possible solutions to
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 problems. Laws should be implemented in the largely populated areas to penalize the people so that people themselves realize and plan their children
accordingly
. Free
education
 must be provided so that everyone can be
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 and
this
 will reduce the
illiteracy
rate
 as well.
For example
, in Japan
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 is a law on the number of children a person can have
,
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 if they exceed
this
 number they are penalized through hefty fines. Due to
this
, the
illiteracy
rate
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Japan is quite minimal. To recapitulate, the world will change entirely in the coming ten years, and we have to plan today if we want it to be a better place for our children. Problems like higher
population
 and rise of more uneducated people in the world can only be solved through some essential laws and free
education
 for all.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Ecosystem
  • Renewable resources
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Healthcare system
  • Pension crisis
  • Curriculum development
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning platforms
  • Lifelong learning
  • Public policy
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Green technology
  • Population density
  • Generational equity
  • Economic disparity
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