Some people think parents should not encourage children to do part-time jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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competition in the professional

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has grown fierce. Some believe parents should not motivate their children not to be a part of the corporate

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by taking a part-time job. I completely agree with

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essay, I will give two reasons to support my view.

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reason why students and teenagers should not be a part of the professional

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it could deviate their focus from studies.

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is to say, as many students studying subjects like science and technology has already a lot to concentrate as their subjects could be difficult and require thorough attention throughout to be able to succeed in it.

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, a medical student, in order to pass his subject, is required to give maximum to his study and give time to practice his practical.

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, if a student chooses to work part-time,

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could divert his focus and he might end up failing.

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ack of knowledge and experience. Surviving in the corporate

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solely depends on the amount of comprehension a person has combined with the amount of exposure they have in their professional lives.

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, working in a company requires a certain amount of work experience and understanding.

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, a student can always be a part of the working culture once he

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their education and

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equired certificates. To illustrate

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, a software engineer can be directly hired by top companies as soon as he finishes his course. In conclusion, it is always

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for a child to concentrate

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his studies and gain experience in his field before joining the work culture.