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Reading for pleasure can develop imagination and language skills better than watching TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 day and age, it is believed that the benefits that reading for pleasure brings about far outweigh that of watching TV. As far as I am concerned, it is completely true that reading enjoyment can improve imagination and language skills.
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, it is worth considering that reading engages creativity. Research has shown that browsing through texts is an act of play - one that allows us to experience different worlds in our imagination.
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,
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 screens show off every detail, books require our
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 to constantly visualise images of figures and interpret the flow of the story.
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, reading can be seen as a creative and interactive process
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 to the passive act of
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 the television.
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, reading for pleasure can be referred to as an
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independent
 and recreational activity that provides a strong foundation for critical, digital and information literacy. Specifically, reading materials contain advanced vocabulary and complicated grammatical structures which can contribute greatly to expanding students' breadth of knowledge.
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, experts claim that joyful reading is an important prerequisite to becoming an effective learner. Particularly, independent reading can promote reading attainment and writing ability. It
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 encourages text comprehension and grammar understanding.
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, conversations in shows or programmes often lack depth and
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;
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, watching TV does not effectively empower us with the development of cognitive functions. To summarise, reading is meant to be a purposeful and exciting experience whose benefits are extensive and far-reaching. Turning pages is closely associated with an increase in vocabulary range and grammatical structures, as well
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creative ability. To my mind, reading is not only a leisure activity but
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 a social
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practice
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 as well.

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Your grammar is generally accurate, but there are some minor errors. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and verb tense consistency.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • imagination
  • language skills
  • active engagement
  • creativity
  • vocabulary
  • language usage
  • passive
  • simplified
  • dialogue
  • depth
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