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University students always focus on one specialist subject, but some people think universities should encourage their students to study a range of subjects in addition to their own subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a debate
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 whether tertiary students should take
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ifferent
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 to focus on their one specific
subject
. While some people believe that studying different subjects apart from their own
subject
 brings benefits for the tertiary students, I,
however
, side with those who believe it does not for three main reasons.
First
 of all, diversify the
subject
 of the area of university students may bring financial hardship
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orm them. Nowadays most of the university’s students struggle to pay their
program
 fees and most of they need to obtain a
student
 loan.
Therefore
, adding more subjects to
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program
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 means increase the cost of their
program
.
Furthermore
, time is another reason. Most of the degree programs are fulltime
program
 which means most of the students will be at campus
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 in order to complete their
program
 within 3 years. If different subjects are added in their
program
, it will make their
program
 longer.
Moreover
, students
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feel overwhelmed if more subjects are summed to their schedules. While I concede that learning different subjects may broader the students’ vision, I strongly believe
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ertiary
student
 may lose their focus by adding different subjects in their curriculum.
For example
, if a medical
student
 adds sociology or history
subject
 in his/her schedule, he or she may expend more time studying it other
then
 subjects that are relevant to their field.
Consequently
, at the end of the term, they may fail the important subjects that are crucial for them in their careers or they will not have a great mark. To conclude,
although
 adding different
subject
 apart from the students’
subject
 may amplify their vision.
However
, I strongly believe that tertiary
student
 should put all their efforts towards their own
subject
 as at the end of their
program
 they have substantial knowledge about their field.
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