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It is predicted that robots are going to become increasingly important in our lives How could robots be used in the future Will this development be a positive or a negative development.

#robots #lives #future #development
Even though the use of robots
have
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 become
common place
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, there is an assumption that they are more likely to become more essential in human
life
. There is growing evidence that mobile robots can be utilized in
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ealthcare field which
contribute
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 to society and
therefore
, I believe
this
 is a
postive
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positive
 improvement in modern
life
. Clearly, there are a wide range of
technically
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 robots can be used in the near future,
particulary
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particularly
 as
m
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edical provider. Take Convid-19
for example
, there are many doctors and nurses suffered from the pandemic,
that is
 due to the virus can be contagious from person to person
whcih
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which
 lead to many health workers died.
Therefore
, If robots can be used to monitor patients and give treatment, it might alleviate the shortage of medical workers worldwide.
Moreover
, artificial
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also
 can rescue human's
life
 in
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azardous
environment
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such
 as wildfire or mass
explusion
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expulsion
explosion
. That's the fact that they are less likely to be impacted by the environment and physical limitation whereas human might lose their
life
 in
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angerous condition.
As a result
, robots might be designed not only
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manfacture
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manufacture
 industries but
also
 rescue vulnerable people
life
.
In other words
, they might play a crucial role in the future.
Interms
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In terms
 of
postive
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positive
 development, robots are seems to be safer in some circumstance. In
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, they might be
lwss
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less
 prone to injury or death, even if they are damaged, they may be fixed or updated.
On the other hand
, once people
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, they are irreversible.
Moreover
,
productivety
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productivity
 is another
benefits
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benefit
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 In the past, factories depend on
lobors
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labours
labour
 work but today automated can be operated. Because of
this
, robots
seems
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 to be more effective than
h
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uman being, regardless of time and physical limitation. In
summery
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summary
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, It could be suggested that robots are increasingly popular in the future because they are wide multifunction.
Therefore
, If artificial
intelligent
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 can be utilized properly,
I'm believe
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 that
this
develpment
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development
 is
postive
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positive
 progression in society.
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