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In some societies, the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing. Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crimes should receive adult punishment. To what extent do you agree?

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A majority number of criminal activity is carried out by youngsters in some community. While few individuals believe that adolescent, without thinking of their
age
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ighest level of adult retribution for committing unlawful activities, others simply do not.
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To begin
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Nevertheless
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ame level of maturity like elder people. Sometimes they gang up with elder criminals and commit some huge crimes like homicide, robbery, theft even rape. A recent study shows that, in Arizona and other nations, 80% juveniles do almost
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ame wrongdoing as adults.
However
, young individuals should not be treated like adult criminals as they are minor and in most cases, teenager
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 crimes without knowing fatal consequences. Again, many children like in Bangladesh, India, Pakistan and Nepal, neither they get primary education nor any basic rights. So they often mixed up with criminals as they do not have family or guardian to look after.
For instance
, most of the street children in Dhaka city are
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 and they often involved in different types of
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riminal
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However
, the level of violence and
age
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ajor sentence. In conclusion,
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oung child should not be charged for major punishment like the adult. Law enforcement or agency should consider their
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 and situation before giving them any penalty.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • juvenile delinquency
  • criminal behavior
  • rehabilitation
  • recidivism
  • adolescent development
  • retribution
  • impulse control
  • the justice system
  • societal influences
  • environmental factors
  • juvenile justice
  • punitive measures
  • adult incarceration
  • youth crime
  • reformative programs
  • deterrence
  • mitigating circumstances
  • restorative justice
  • correctional facilities
  • peer pressure
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