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now a days modern modes of transport are available still some people believe a bicycle is the best way to get from one place to another. do you agree or disagree?

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In the 21st century, technology updates day by day in which there are many latest
transportation
 facilities are available in the market. In that, we get more facilities and the most important thing is
time
 saviour. So I disagree with the statement that everywhere we can not
use
 a bicycle. we have to
use
 modern transport.
Firstly
, in the market,there are many modern modes of
transportation
 available which we used in our daily life. The big advantage of using modest transport is that it is
time
 sever and
time
 is very important for everybody. Modern travel is more
time efficient
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time-efficient
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 if we have to go to one country to another country, it is very
time consuming
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time-consuming
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. But, we can
use
 aeroplane so we can cover 1000 miles in some hours and we can save much
time
 using that modern technology.
Therefore
, modern travel is very efficient
then
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 using
b
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a
the
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icycle
Secondly
, updated
transportation
 provided many facilities. By which our journey is more comfortable so that anyone can
use
 it. The reason for
that is
, these facilities have comfortable seats, air conditioner, washroom and many others.
For example
 , if we used for our journey in an aeroplane in that , we provided all the facilities. And a big advantage that it is very comfortable on a long journey. To conclude, we have many advantages to using modern modes of technology like airway, train,car, bus and many more,
however
 using the bicycle. so we can help modern
transportation
 for our daily ration.
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