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It is suggested that curfew hours must be implemented among children. And they are only allowed to go out at night with the supervision of adult. Do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, the state restricted adolescents from going outside late at
night
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 without the supervision of an adult. While others are against
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 mandate, some are in favour. It is my strong conviction that
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 restriction is necessary for children because the community is dangerous at late
night
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 and if they are in their
home
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 during
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time
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, they can bond with their family and can foster a good relationship.
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, outside
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ome is unsafe because of some people with criminal minds. Thieves and other criminals often operate on the cover of the dark. They hide in the dark corners and waiting for their
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 victim.
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 unfortunate phenomenon is evident on the Police record in the City of Baguio which shows that seventy per cent of crimes happened at
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time
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, and eighty per cent of the victims are between 12 to 15 years old.
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, if young people are inside their
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 late at
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, they will be protected and will not fall as a victim of criminals.
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, Due to the busy life of parents caused by work-related activities and the social life of children, family members often do not have
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 together. If children are in their homes at
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 with their parent and other family members, they can bond together and
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 will foster a good relationship. Curfew hours could be used to do interesting things with family members like baking, watching a movie and even a simple talk. In a survey conducted by ‘JAG magazine’, the average
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 that all family members are together in the United States is 45 minutes and it was concluded that
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 is the reason why children are not properly guided by parents. If curfew is implemented a
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 to be together will be created.
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 with the supervision of parents, children might be protected when they go out at
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, I believe that it is still unsafe for them because a villain could still do wrong things like murder or robbery. They might end up as both a victim of crimes.
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, it would be much better to impose curfew among adolescent. In conclusion, preventing children from leaving
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 late at
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 is necessary because
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 will not only ensure their safety, but
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 could
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 create
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 with other family members.
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