It is suggested that curfew hours must be implemented among children. And they are only allowed to go out at night with the supervision of adult. Do you agree or disagree?

Recently, the state restricted adolescents from going outside late at
night
without the supervision of an adult. While others are against
this
mandate, some are in favour. It is my strong conviction that
such
restriction is necessary for children because the community is dangerous at late
night
and if they are in their
home
during
such
time
, they can bond with their family and can foster a good relationship.
To begin
with, at
night
, outside
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ome is unsafe because of some people with criminal minds. Thieves and other criminals often operate on the cover of the dark. They hide in the dark corners and waiting for their
next
victim.
This
unfortunate phenomenon is evident on the Police record in the City of Baguio which shows that seventy per cent of crimes happened at
night
time
, and eighty per cent of the victims are between 12 to 15 years old.
Hence
, if young people are inside their
home
late at
night
, they will be protected and will not fall as a victim of criminals.
Additionally
, Due to the busy life of parents caused by work-related activities and the social life of children, family members often do not have
time
together. If children are in their homes at
night
with their parent and other family members, they can bond together and
this
will foster a good relationship. Curfew hours could be used to do interesting things with family members like baking, watching a movie and even a simple talk. In a survey conducted by ‘JAG magazine’, the average
time
that all family members are together in the United States is 45 minutes and it was concluded that
this
is the reason why children are not properly guided by parents. If curfew is implemented a
time
to be together will be created.
Although
with the supervision of parents, children might be protected when they go out at
night
, I believe that it is still unsafe for them because a villain could still do wrong things like murder or robbery. They might end up as both a victim of crimes.
Hence
, it would be much better to impose curfew among adolescent. In conclusion, preventing children from leaving
home
late at
night
is necessary because
this
will not only ensure their safety, but
this
could
also
create
time
with other family members.
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