Some people think that children should only play team sports such as football and basketball, while others think they should be involved here n individual sports such as running and swimming. Do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that children should be involved in
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sports rather than individual sports. Others think that individual sports are important to be in children's
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life. I believe that individual sports play a huge role
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socialization and realization of children.
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with, we should bear in mind that individual sports are appropriate for increasing
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ersonal abilities of a child
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as faster movement and reaction. While
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sports are focused more on
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and communication between its members.
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, swimming as an individual sport is reasonably helpful for a child to concentrate more on personal goals
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as longer breath-holding underwater. What is more, because of individual sports, a young sportsman is able to think and make decisions independently, relying only on their abilities.
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,
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sports are considered to train children for working and communicating in groups which is crucial for living in society.
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, playing football, children rely on each other and every player understands that they are responsible for
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onsequences of a game. Remarkably,
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sports are competitive activity as well. It means that
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playing in
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sports, children learn how to deal with opponents. As far as I am concerned, if a sport is individual, it does not mean that a child will be face to face with themselves.
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, there are plenty of competitions among individual sports
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as different marathons. So
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, a young sportsman is guaranteed to be socialized and "communicate" with opponents, even participating in individual sports. To summarize, we should take into account
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dvantages of individual sports because of their
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quality of children will training and socialization.

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