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Some people think that the teenager years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The issue of whether teenage times are the happiest part of our lives or not is a debatable issue and people are divided in their opinions regarding
this
. According to some people,
adult
life
 is the happiest part of our lives. In my opinion, both groups are right because happiness is a state of mind that can be achieved in both parts of
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life
. On the one hand,adolescence means freedom and cheerfulness.
This
 is the period when most of the teenagers do not have greater responsibilities like
adult
 people and they enjoy lives full of joys, dream and vision. The harsh cruelty and complexity of
life
 rarely
bothers
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 the teenagers and they live a
life
 which is often better than the
adult
 people around them. Teenagers do not have
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inancial burden because they mostly depend on their parents for money and are mostly guided by their parents for decisions.In
this
 way,they can enjoy carefree childhood and sincere brotherhood.
Besides
,they are under the aegis of parents both mentally and physically which means they can get
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mergency .
On the other hand
,
adult
life
 offers more financial freedom on one hand and
on the contrary
 many unavoidable responsibilities.
Also
,the grown-up people decide their journey of
life
 themselves and
this
 is the freedom very few teenagers enjoy.The happiness a father feels while playing with his sons and daughters is unimaginable for a teenager. In conclusion, adulthood and teenage
life
 have their share of ups and downs. While it is the lack of responsibilities that makes
life
 joyous during adolescence, it is the realization of one’s joyfulness that makes
adult
life
 more memorable. In my opinion, it is up to each individual to decide which period is the happiest in their lives.
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