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Nuclear energy is a better choice for meeting increasing demand, agree or disagree?

#energy #choice #demand
Nowadays people are looking for
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lternative way to provide more
energy
 demand. Some people think rather than fossil fuel, nuclear
energy
 is a better choice. In my opinion, I am standing for
this
 argument. Nuclear power has some benefits that other
energy
 does not do.
Firstly
 it is a sustainable
energy
 source, meaning that it can be used to produce electricity without wasting limited natural resources like coal, oil or gas. As everyone
known
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, fossil fuels are being consumed at an alarming rate.
Secondly
, it is cleaner than
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fossil fuel,
in other words
, it can help us reduce carbon setting out which cause global warming.
Finally
, with the improvement in nuclear technology, it can provide more work opportunities and
also
 make the industry do some innovation to become more efficient.
On the other hand
, there are some aspects
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 these arguments. The safety of nuclear power is a considerable question. Once there is a dangerous accident happened, it would be a disaster. Thousands of people will be affected or be hurt.
In addition
,
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uclear power station would cover
a enormous areas
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, getting rid of
it
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 own square, nobody wants to live near it.
Moreover
, it is a high
costs
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 to build a nuclear station, the expensive spending will impose a heavy financial burden on
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overnment. In conclusion, I do agree with the opinion that nuclear should be used more or less in some countries,
such
 as some developed countries.
However
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ountry’s development has been driven by technological and scientific breakthroughs, authorities are expected to improve
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ountry international status and rise citizens standards of living.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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