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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Advertising keeps an important role in our life. Advertisements tell us about new products that improve our lives. I support
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 statement because it is a part of the new Product Development process. As we all know that with the time changes we need products, processes in a better way. And Advertisement is a marketing tool which is very helpful to convey the details of any product. today's there are people who are working on it, how to think differently or out of a box , and we can use advertisements to spread any message in the country or world. I want to give a recent example of Covid-19 which is a virus spreading worldwide and does not have any vaccine right now. As it is a new virus so it is very important to aware people regarding
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 scenario advertisement playing a vital role and spreading the awareness about its symptoms and remedies. Do we know that at present only precautions are the only way to keep yourself from viruses
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 Masks, Hand sanitizers are very essential products in any stage. So marketing or awareness of same products really required. By using these we can save us as well as other's life. Though we have a different segment of customers so as per their convenience products variety is in the market. So from the above examples, I want to say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Advertising doesn't impose decisions on us that we have to buy these products forcefully. It depends on us that after getting the information about the product to decide that it is useful or not for us. So I want to conclude that advertisement is necessary for us.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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