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The diagrams illustrate the results of a questionnaire regarding customer service of the Parkway
Hotel
 with the samples, which were collected from 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010. In general, mostly in 2005, the visitors of the Parkway
Hotel
 marked in the questionnaire as satisfactory among other categories,
however
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the
hotel
 services were improved over time and in 2009, most of the people rated good. The number of people, who marked the
hotel
 services were poor, was reduced over the years too. Categorically, in 2005, only 5% of travellers found that the
hotel
 services were excellent, whereas that number increased steadily and in 2010, it was way above than 25%. In 2010,
nealry
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nearly
 40% of people marked the services as good and
that is
 a quarter more than in 2005. In the year of 2005, 45% of people found that the services of that
hotel
 were somewhat satisfactory and the number reduced in 2010, and it was 17%. Moving on to the other point, in 2005, just above than 20%, felt that
hotel
 services were poor,
although
that is
 reduced in 2010 by nearly 9%. The opinions for very poor category decreased
nealry
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nearly
 11% over the years.
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