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You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a
job
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 working in the City Museum
shop
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 during the holidays. You decide to apply for the
job
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. Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter, introduce yourself explain what experience and special skills you have explain why you are interested in the
job
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 Dear Sir or Madam, I
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 in reference to the
job
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 advertised for the City Museum
shop
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on
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in
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 The Times newspaper. My name is Srinath Pallamparthy, and I am
21-years
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21 years
 old
studying
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and studying
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 Indian history
in
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at
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 St. Xavier
college
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College
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. I am very much keen
in
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on
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 working
this
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 summer. Previously I worked at Redsocks gift
shop
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 as a cashier for
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2 years
2-years
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2 years
. I
also
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 worked as a customer
attendent
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attendant
 for 1 year at a gas station in
Kingroy
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Kingaroy
. I have experience in handling a cash register. During these
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 I have developed communication skills and can speak English fluently. I enjoy visiting museums, and I covered most of the museums in our country as a part of my education in Indian history. I can use
this
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 knowledge in guiding the customers to purchase
souveniers
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souvenirs
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 from the
shop
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.
Also
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,
this
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job
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 can help me in studying more about history
while
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 working at the same time. I look forward to receiving your response. Yours faithfully, Srinath Pallamparthy

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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