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Some feel that countries should produce most of the food that is eaten in their country and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many today are increasing
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the opinion that
countries
 should be self-sufficient in their food production and import as little as possible. Though I grant
this
 is unrealistic in certain
countries
, the economic implications are convincing. In most
countries
, imported foods are simply a luxury but
this
 belies those nations where imports ensure survival. Some of these
countries
 include populous Southeast Asian nations, and numerous Middle Eastern and African
countries
. The reasons range from poorly developed infrastructure, little arable soil, and increased vulnerability to natural disasters. Many Asian
countries
,
in particular
 , import and stockpile basic foods
such
 as rice for potential catastrophes. As agricultural technology develops and allows for crops that require less water, their desperation will lessen but it would be inhumane today to starve citizens in these
countries
. The above-mentioned scenarios are exceptions; the majority of
countries
 would be better served through vibrant food cultivation and production industries. The economic impact is twofold. First , these industries employ thousands of agricultural and meatpacking workers.
Secondly
 , these workers
then
 contribute to the local economy by buying goods and services. Replace them with international meal conglomerates and suddenly they are funding the GDP of another country. A good counter-example to
this
 would be in South Korea where the vast majority of products are nationally produced and, in fact, were some of the initial, primary sources of income for technology giants like Samsung and LG. In conclusion, except in extreme cases,
countries
 should import fewer food products to better serve their citizenry economically. There will always be a place for a limited range of imports but it should not supersede local production.
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