Many companies sponsor sports as a way of advertising themselves. Some people think this is good for the world of sport, while others think it is a negative. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Although
it is completely normal great brands fund sports in order to
self promoting
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their marketing, some people agree with
this
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, while others
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that
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attitude can be harmful
for
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the sports environment. I consider that sports
definetely
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needs to be funded by great organizations once
this
money
can guarantee that sports continue to exist no matter what economic conditions a country can be found. On the one hand, some believe that all the
money
used to subsidy sports is almost a necessity once without
this
financial help lot o professionals and non-professionals sports clubs could not even exist.
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, most of
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thletes
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on their clubs to survive considering that they work in exchange to represent a sports team.
Consequently
, their clubs can not afford their salaries whether there is no sponsor behind it, which had
payed
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to expose their brands on the uniform of these athletes. So, it is important for sports that
this
money
come through companies that have interests to expose their logos thereby evaluating their brands and
consequently
offering more structure to these sports teams.
On the other hand
, there are those who think that a sponsor can be
harmfull
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to sports. In general
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it is
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that
this
money
creates a colossal difference between
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competitors.
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, it is possible to notice nowadays that some sports teams usually receive more
money
than others
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because
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their localization in the country or even because they have a large number of fans.
therefore
, these clubs would
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more consumers for the brands and surely developing the companies marketings.
This
creates a huge difference between the overriding core of sports which is to compete
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not being considered the
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club can have. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions, I think that sports ought to continue being funded by great organizations in order to give chances for the clubs offer better conditions for their athletes and
consequently
serving as a motivation for them turning sports more and more attractive.
Submitted by Marcel on

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