Many companies sponsor sports as a way of advertising themselves. Some people think this is good for the world of sport, while others think it is a negative. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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it is completely normal great brands fund sports in order to

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their marketing, some people agree with

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, while others

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attitude can be harmful

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the sports environment. I consider that sports

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needs to be funded by great organizations once

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money

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can guarantee that sports continue to exist no matter what economic conditions a country can be found. On the one hand, some believe that all the

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used to subsidy sports is almost a necessity once without

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financial help lot o professionals and non-professionals sports clubs could not even exist.

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, most of

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thletes

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on their clubs to survive considering that they work in exchange to represent a sports team.

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, their clubs can not afford their salaries whether there is no sponsor behind it, which had

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to expose their brands on the uniform of these athletes. So, it is important for sports that

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come through companies that have interests to expose their logos thereby evaluating their brands and

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offering more structure to these sports teams.

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, there are those who think that a sponsor can be

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creates a colossal difference between

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competitors.

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, it is possible to notice nowadays that some sports teams usually receive more

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than others

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their localization in the country or even because they have a large number of fans.

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, these clubs would

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more consumers for the brands and surely developing the companies marketings.

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creates a huge difference between the overriding core of sports which is to compete

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not being considered the

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club can have. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinions, I think that sports ought to continue being funded by great organizations in order to give chances for the clubs offer better conditions for their athletes and

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serving as a motivation for them turning sports more and more attractive.

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Logical structure

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Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

sponsorship
advertisement
financial support
visibility
popularity
athletes
excel
healthy competition
commercialization
fair competition
profits
well-being
exclusion
less popular sports

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