Some people think young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should been encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc. to serve society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Obtaining a

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is a goal for many students you just graduated from their secondary

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, some people believe that young people should obtain a tertiary

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regular or trading jobs

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as builders, plumbers etc. I, side with those who deem that they should go to university. On one hand, it can be argued that obtaining a

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is not

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guaranteed that students will have a well-paid job after graduation. Due to high competition

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the field and lack of experience, some

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ewly graduated students do not find a job very easily.

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the University of Oxford, U.K., has shown that the rate of unemployment is higher within students with a

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than people who

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not hold a

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, another factor to consider is cost. Going to a university is costly as most of the best of universities around of world is private.

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, not only is there a risk to be unemployed after graduating

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but surely young people will have a

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debt to be paid out within a few years.

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, I side with those who believe that young people should acquire a

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after finishing their secondary

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. While a concede that there is a risk of unemployment within newly graduates, most of the students who have obtained usually have better salaries and work in a better environment than who has not sought for tertiary

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, a recent study from a well-know HR company in

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SA indicated that most of the people who has a

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, work in a senior position after 5 years of their graduation.

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, another reason to seek

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a

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is to acquire knowledge in a particular field. University is a place where people are able to develop their knowledge in a particular field and

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knowledge never will be taken from them.

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, tertiary students will learn subjects and expand or change their way to see the world above the average.

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, if a person

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a law

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, he/she will know more about law and legal procedure than the average, and

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is already an advantage in

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modern world. In conclusion,

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there are some people who believe that young people should seek for stable jobs after graduating from their secondary school because of the risk of unemployment and cost of tertiary

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, I, side with those who believe that despite

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the cost of the tertiary

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, young people will benefit for having a

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as they will have better salaries and above all

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they will have expertise.