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Some people think that current environmental issues are global problems and should, therefore, be dealt with by the government while others believe that these problems can only be tackled by individuals. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #government #individuals
The chart illustrates the implications for dental health on the basis of
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cid
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 in
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outh over
time
. Overall, cane
sugar
 contributes
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tooth
 decays by creating more acid over
time
, whereas honey is the least responsible
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 decaying. Categorically,
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up to
 20 minutes after being eaten, cane
sugar
 will contribute more acid inside
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outh and after five minutes of eating,
PH
level
 will stand at 3.5, which is more
acidic
 than any other sweet substances. That amount will gradually dip over the
time
 period, and after 20 minutes, it will be nearly 4.5
PH
level
. For the case of fruit
sugar
, after five minutes of eating, the
PH
level
 will be nearly at 4 and after 20 minutes, it will overcome the threshold of minimum
PH
level
 for
tooth
 decay.
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, honey is least
acidic
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inimum impact for
tooth
 decay.
On the other hand
, after 20 minutes, only cane
sugar
 will still remain more
acidic
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tooth
 decay. After more than 30 minutes
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only
old
, it's
acidic
level
 will be 5.5
PH
 and will not impact dental health anymore. Whereas, fruit
sugar
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 way less active
time
 than crane
sugar
.
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