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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extend do you agree?

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I agree that certain prisoners have to do unpaid
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 of putting them behind bars. Because a person may commit something wrong intentionally or non intentionally. Sometimes the situation slips from our hand and leads us to go into
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ifferent path. I recently watched a video of prisoners helping a fallen police officer in
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jail. They are bad guys, I agree with that. If we want to make them better human, we need to give a chance to prove themselves. I am implying to certain prisoners, but most of the prisoners
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 the crime or Violence. But those who
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 to make a change, we need to make
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community
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 service. So that they learn about different persons who make their household with
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 money, but with not with stealing or violence. In conclusion, I support certain prisoners to do the unpaid
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 work rather than putting them behind the bars. Even if they do not change after the
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 service, they must be put in jail.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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